Author Topic: A story I've worked on! (Read 75701 times)

Sophih · « **Reply #60 on:** May 31, 2005, 02:30:45 pm »

i''m the only catgirl here so back off! Gerrr... it's mine and i might share ^,~

Swiftman · « **Reply #61 on:** May 31, 2005, 05:35:42 pm »

Huh boy... Don't say those words to Trigger. He'll run all the way from the East coast (I presume that's where he is) to where you are, and dance around you with cheesy techno music holding glowsticks. (or whatever he does to charm women.)

Trigger · « **Reply #62 on:** May 31, 2005, 05:40:35 pm »

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Huh boy... Don't say those words to Trigger. He'll run all the way from the East coast (I presume that's where he is) to where you are, and dance around you with cheesy techno music holding glowsticks. (or whatever he does to charm women.)

LMAO!!!

......I'm from Hell!!1!1...I mean...Ohio....

No I'd proably steal the Popes hat scream "BABALOOENGRISHOOO BABALOOOENGRIIIISHOOOOO" while swinging a bible around wildly.

...That...Or try and be normal....I've been told I can be quite the charmer...when I want to be that is...And I'm shy anyways, i'd probably run farther AWAY then nearer to her.

Swiftman · « **Reply #63 on:** May 31, 2005, 05:45:40 pm »

Ah, don't be scared of Morrigan. She won't hurt you. Just me. She knows I ain't gonna hurt her for nothin, and she knows my weakness. So she has a bigger advantage over me than you.

Trigger · « **Reply #64 on:** May 31, 2005, 05:51:02 pm »

She has the same advantage Kary does...

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I read in another topic that you don't hurt anything that has 'girl' or 'cat' in the name, and I apply to one of those. So, natually: me > trigger

I didn't think shed see that since I posted it awhile ago...

And Kary was only a GIRL. Morrigan is a CATGIRL.

Its like kryptonite to superman!!!

T_T;

Swiftman · « **Reply #65 on:** May 31, 2005, 06:06:43 pm »

Yes, Sophih does have the catgirl power, but she can't wield a 2x4 near as good.

Trigger · « **Reply #66 on:** May 31, 2005, 06:08:20 pm »

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Yes, Sophih does have the catgirl power, but she can't wield a 2x4 near as good.

She doesn't need a 2x4. Shes got claws, sharp teeth, a super sexy tail.

The list goes on for natural weapons she has!! She doesn't NEED a 2x4.

Swiftman · « **Reply #67 on:** May 31, 2005, 06:10:07 pm »

Yes, but can Sophih take down a 6'8 guy in a suit of armor, like Kary can? I dunno...

Trigger · « **Reply #68 on:** May 31, 2005, 06:11:32 pm »

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Yes, but can Sophih take down a 6'8 guy in a suit of armor, like Kary can? I dunno...

Uhhhh O.o When has THAT ever happened?

And besides She is a catgirl, thus she can seduce and kill him.

Swiftman · « **Reply #69 on:** May 31, 2005, 06:23:49 pm »

(as a note: Garland, my friend here, is 6'8 and is an expert black smith. he's made lots of medieval stuff, and Kary took him down with nothing but a 2x4)

And All Morrigan would have to do is stand there, and she would win. Garland has no courage around girls, other than Kary and Lacus.

Trigger · « **Reply #70 on:** May 31, 2005, 06:28:46 pm »

You know...

if you mix you, this Garland, and a hairy gorrila together...you get me.

A shy, hairy, kinda intellectual, weird guy.

Hell my nickname around where I live is "Sas", which is short for Sasquatch.

-___-

But thats all irrelevant.

I want you to go back and rewrite the begining of your story, It needs to include more detail about the charactors. All we know about Deccus is he has thick armour, and a custom weapon. Thats really about it. No hiar color, no eye color, no hieght. Thats it.

You need to put more detail into the apperance of your charactors. Becuase you never know when someone might pop up with a flash movie series about your book.
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Swiftman · « **Reply #71 on:** May 31, 2005, 08:15:54 pm »

Yeah, now that you mention it I was pretty sparse with Deccus. Back then I was unsure of his appearence, but now I know it, so I should go back.
And yeah, that scene with Holly and co. in Dorm room 5 was lacking in details. That's what I need more, is to flesh it out a bit.

Thanks, Trig! I won't re-write the whole thing, jstu add a few better parts here and there.
A flash movie on my books? *whistles* that's pretty far down the road.

Trigger · « **Reply #72 on:** May 31, 2005, 08:22:54 pm »

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A flash movie on my books? *whistles* that's pretty far down the road.

You never know. It could already be in the works...

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Swiftman · « **Reply #73 on:** May 31, 2005, 08:47:51 pm »

Oh, do YOU know flash or something? I thought that was Superyoshi's shtick.

Trigger · « **Reply #74 on:** May 31, 2005, 08:49:59 pm »

You know, since coming here, if I posted my flash movies I'd be infringing on TWO peoples sticks.

Brooms, and then superyoshis.

MAY I HAVE NO UNIQUENESS!!! ((Don't say I can act like a n00b, cuase I'll SKIN YOU ALIVE if you do

))